I think it needs a lot more fleshing out. All it sounds like you have so far is a name (Siegfried) and that fact that they have lots of robotic units. What's their motivation? What's their goal? Who are they up against? What units do they control?
Also "overseen all technological progress in the Koprulu Sector" is incredibly vague. Does this include protoss tech as well?
I think it needs a lot more fleshing out. All it sounds like you have so far is a name (Siegfried) and that fact that they have lots of robotic units. What's their motivation? What's their goal? Who are they up against? What units do they control?
Also "overseen all technological progress in the Koprulu Sector" is incredibly vague. Does this include protoss tech as well?
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