From a technical perspective this was excellent, but from a story telling perspective meh.
If you are trying to produce a comedic machinima you need to change your format. Perhaps each episode can be a compilation of short 1 to 3 minute skits like sanity not included or robot chicken. I felt that after the infestigator joke everything dragged on when the scene should have been cut there. Also in Video 1 I got the borederlands reference but that may go over the heads of people whom haven't played borederlands 1.5. In the first 2 the delivery of the jokes seemed to be a little forced and the ending of didn't really convey the premise of the episode all that well that is unless you read the description.
It isn't epic perse but It is an excellent start for a series that has a lot of potential. TIghten up the format and improve the writing and it could be a machinima realms feature.
Thanks for the criticisms! :D The only person who is writing this is me. And unfortunately, I'm a bad writer. It's not a lack of confidence. I'm just terrible at it. And even more annoyingly the only writers I know don't play Starcraft. I've been trying to find people to help take over that role but...to no avail. One person did contact me, great guy, but barely spoke English. I'm the kind of person you give me a script and I make it happen. Rather and write one. I'll try my best to make the writing better. But in my personal life, I am usually the one people make fun of for having a very terrible sense of humor. So...if I can find someone better to write, I am all for them helping me out.
But I do mostly agree (80%) with what you are saying. Also, we're partnered with TGS. So no chance of it being on Machinima. Plus they as a channel are know for being really bad to work for.
Its pretty good! Glad to see other people are doing machinima. I think that, to make the voices sound more natural you should had some delay at 100ms-200ms and some light reverb. It does wonders to making the sound less "dry". Also, how did toy do that camera move in Episode 2, for the second shot? I am newer to the editor and cannot figure out how to do more complex moves like that.
For the Hellion part...I wanted to do something way less...lame.
Hello everyone at SC2 Mapster. My account is new, but I constantly lurk the forums and pop into the IRC to seek some help from the kind people in the mapmaking community. Just putting this up for anyone who is willing to watch it. We are also looking for some help, I am in need of someone who knows triggers well and a writer. Because I can't keep doing everything myself.
Episode 1:
Episode 2:
Episode 3:
Thank you anyone for watching! I am willing to take any criticisms anyone has. I can handle it. :D
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Thanks for the criticisms! :D The only person who is writing this is me. And unfortunately, I'm a bad writer. It's not a lack of confidence. I'm just terrible at it. And even more annoyingly the only writers I know don't play Starcraft. I've been trying to find people to help take over that role but...to no avail. One person did contact me, great guy, but barely spoke English. I'm the kind of person you give me a script and I make it happen. Rather and write one. I'll try my best to make the writing better. But in my personal life, I am usually the one people make fun of for having a very terrible sense of humor. So...if I can find someone better to write, I am all for them helping me out.
But I do mostly agree (80%) with what you are saying. Also, we're partnered with TGS. So no chance of it being on Machinima. Plus they as a channel are know for being really bad to work for.
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@OneTwoSC: Go
Season 1. Great. Then from two on it was just...meh.
Also, new episode!0
@zeldarules28: Go
Thankyou. I have, as frustrating as it is, and as much as it crashes. >.> It's like I am using Unreal Editor 2.0 all over again.
I really appreciate everyone who has watched so far.
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Its pretty good! Glad to see other people are doing machinima. I think that, to make the voices sound more natural you should had some delay at 100ms-200ms and some light reverb. It does wonders to making the sound less "dry". Also, how did toy do that camera move in Episode 2, for the second shot? I am newer to the editor and cannot figure out how to do more complex moves like that.
For the Hellion part...I wanted to do something way less...lame.
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Hello everyone at SC2 Mapster. My account is new, but I constantly lurk the forums and pop into the IRC to seek some help from the kind people in the mapmaking community. Just putting this up for anyone who is willing to watch it. We are also looking for some help, I am in need of someone who knows triggers well and a writer. Because I can't keep doing everything myself.
Episode 1:
Episode 2:
Episode 3:
Thank you anyone for watching! I am willing to take any criticisms anyone has. I can handle it. :D