Hey! I just finished playing through your map! It was great. I made a video of my play through which gives my impressions as well as possible improvements. I'll post a link when it's all uploaded n whatnot. I think you did a lot of stuff right. I played on medium, and I think the difficulty was appropriate. The terrain was nice in both visuals and flow. The game length was perfect as well, I generally aim for 20-30 minutes for a campaign level play through and this hit that nicely. It's a great first mission as well in that it doesn't introduce you to a million brand new things all at once as some campaigners will do.
You did have a few small English errors, but it was great overall. Anything that was wrong, you can just say they were too drunk to speak correctly! :)
Well I'm bad at thinking of more stuff to say in retrospective, so I'll just stop now and let you watch the video when its ready!