I feel like your diction could use some work. It sounds almost too rushed for a cold, calculating, emotionless individual like a nerazim.
I don't know what your effects were but I did my own take with what I use for nerazim. You might find it useful, if only for the acting. https://instaud.io/tBW
Your effects are already pretty solid though, so my only constructive criticism would be to work on making sure your acting is up to snuff!
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