and ya i will try to do better with the voices/volume next time but if you listen just a lil closer you will hear it.. my dad could understand it and hes never played a video game in his life
Is this supposed to be funny? There's some jokes in there, but to be fair I found most of them rather lame and never really laughed. Only cracked a smile at the IdrA QQ about Zerg scouting reference. And at the RA reference from the Russian captain.
What the cinematic did was though, was epic. Some awesome shots in there and probably the best pure in-game cinematic I've seen to date. Terrain, sound and cameraworks are all splendid. My only recommendation here would be
A) less pointless swearing. It annoys me when series do this. I'm not so uptight I can't take a swear word or two, but when it's swearing for the sake of swearing, it just gets boring. 'Fucking' has no place in the sentence "Let's go to the fucking temple". Save it for "Those fucking bastards trapped us!" or such, if you must.
B) the voices. Go download yourself audacity, and use the lower and raise pitch function to create different voices. This allows you to change nothing but your accent when doing the actual recording, and it'll make the whole thing sound less wannabe and more professional.
I'd agree with mozared, especially the swearing. I think it's fine in certain situations, but by the end it seemed like somebody wanted to make zeratul sound mean, so they threw "fucking" behind ever other word. They fucking betrayed us! Get to the fucking temple! Oh, your so stupid, we're fucked if you ever take command, etc..
I'll also add the point that it wasn't really a comedy or a action movie kind of thing. It was like an actiony movie with a few jokes thrown in. Which is fine, but I thought you were going for a comedy show kind of thing.
edit- Never mind, saw you were actually going for an action/comedy. So good job ;)
Like I said before, though, overall it was good. You managed to keep me entertained for the entire 15 minutes ;)
First off THANK YOU VERY MUCH for your compliments on the camera and terrain work and such that is the part that took me the longest and i thought it worked out pretty well.
but the show is just supposed to be a fun, cheesy scifi show that doesn't take it self seriously. I understand what you guys are saying but to me its funny, just the way we act is the funniest part cause its so cheesy, and that's exactly what i was going for. im sorry but i cant please everyone and alot of people like it. and Taranus only said fuck 2 times and they were censored to boot. NONE of those lines you wrote even exist in the show! i welcome your compliments and even your constructive critisism but to throw all my voice acting and jokes in my face and tell me it sucks.. like its not a hollywood movie ITS A SHOW I MADE BY MYSELF IN MY BASEMENT FOR FUN!!!! it wasn't meant to be a big budget movie that Syscal and Ebert review. I worked by myself on it for four months and it just feels like a few people seemed bent on throwing it in my face and telling me its not good enough for them. just enjoy it and dont take it seriously cause I dont and i made the thing. i don't know what else to say like.. I did the best job that i could with what I had and im sorry if you don't like it.
I am adding subtitles, but when i made it i only had my comp to test on and many people watched it including my parents and it sounds perfectly fine, I can see on a laptop or smaller speakers mayb it doesnt sound as good but im not guna be able to hit everything perfectly. the captions are gunna take time cause youtube only allows you to put an actual caption track so I havto make one and get it working rite.
LIKE IM SORY IM NOT TRYING TO BE AN ASS but it hurts when i work for somthing for 4 months and you come here and rip my story and acting apart and tell me that it sucks
I said the thing was the best pure in-game cinematic I've seen so far, how is that ripping apart your story and acting?
Really, I'm only trying to help you improve, as the 'genre' seems a bit off - the humor takes away from the action and vice versa, resulting in a film you can't quite take seriously but isn't quite humoristic either. If you don't want to take my advice, no need to get rabid about it or such - it's your film in the end and you're free to ignore me. But if you want other people to like it (and I'd say I fall under that category), you'd probably do well to adhere to suggestions.
Is this supposed to be funny? There's some jokes in there, but to be fair I found most of them rather lame and never really laughed.
thats beyond constuctive critisism just tell me you dont like my jokes. do u not understand? would you like it if you worked on somthing for 4 months then someone told you that
I do wqant people to like it and people like you too i just feel like all my hard work is being disected like in a movie review or somthing lol.. like you make sence and i know what you mean but like if you dont like it now i doubt you will because i dont have a team or writers its just me and im trying my hardest to make somthing enjoyable so i must just not be a good enough writer for your tastes lol
and it is far from perfect but it never will be perfectly perfect i hope you can enjoy it even a little bit dispite the way it is. That would make me happy and thats all im aiming for
that was an extremely rude comment that had no constructive critisism in it. why would you even post that? like honestly. alot of people love my story and jokes and i think its good thats all that matters
haha wow ok buddy thanks so much you make me feel all warm and bubbly inside
"but from what I read from comments the jokes/story is just not that good."
i actually dont see that said anywhere in any of the comments
i see that the voices need to be louder. i didnt see anyone atall say anything about my story and one person said the jokes could have been funnier so i don't know what comments you are reading but i'd like to see them!
thats beyond constuctive critisism just tell me you dont like my jokes. do u not understand? would you like it if you worked on somthing for 4 months then someone told you that
That depends on what is is I have created. If I know it's good and know the majority of the people will think that, I won't bother. If I'm not sure, then I might take this criticism quite seriously. I don't intend to be mean on purpose, but it was truthfully what I thought. The "I just pissed my pants joke" was one that really made me wonder why you'd even bother with it. Just as I pointed out the really bad, I also pointed out the good by saying it was epic.
If you so prefer I can filter my comments and just point out what I like, but aside from the fact that you wouldn't be getting anymore feedback if everybody did that, I would probably stop watching after a single episode. And people who agree with me would do the same. Nobody would ever say anything bad about your project, but everyone would simply stop following it.
Again; I am not trying to shoot your project down. Overall watching it definitely entertained me for 15 minutes. If you disagree with me, feel free to ignore me. I'm just being honest about what I thought and didn't sugarcoat it.
no man thats what iom trying to say.. dont filter your comments cause thats pointless. im just saying that u cud just say i didnt like your jokes instead of what you said. but its because it thought u were just trying to be negative but whatever dont sensor your comments i want to hear them i just felt like alot of people who dont know how hard it was to make that were telling me it was bad cause first and foremost i made it for myself and friends and had alot of fun making it. like soo much fun... but i just took it in the wrong way. i wil try to be more open minded in the future. but to people like zenx that basically just told me that i was shit and my sotrytelling is shit.. thats just fukin rude in my opinion and shouldnt even be posted. he says that time doesnt equal high quality. who is he to say those kind of things to me for no reason thats just an attack on me personally and he doesnt know anything about me. thats just plain not conducive to the whole mapster environment and community IMO!
I to amongst others found it hard to hear the voices and you're probably going to do something about it but seeing your comments about it it seems that your main phrase to answer that is: My 55 year old dad understood it and he has never played videogames, what's that have to do with anything? Videogames? It's more of a speak english kind of deal, or is it just me? Other than that it was pretty awesome "Zeratuls" round swingy attack cracked me up =P.
First of all, I want to say that could be the coolest thing I have seen made in the SC2 editor so far.
HOWEVER, I agree with most of the other comments. However, you have to understand something about cheesy videos. They are funny because they are bad, not because they tell jokes. Go for funny and cool, not for action/comedy. If you want some advice, PM me and I will send you some. If you are going to make something this awesome, make every aspect of it epic. The only reason people are criticizing you is because the effects are so good, but then the storyline is, well, not. Don't take that personally, take that as a fact. Trust me, I know what kind of humor you are going for here, you just aren't quite reaching it.
Also saying that it is bad IS constructive. You now know that it is bad, and know that it needs to be fixed. Is it more constructive than explaining why it is bad? No, it is not. However it does give you information. Let it go, and realize that people will be jerks sometimes.
Ending note: Absolutely EPIC! Understand that posting in these forums means you are looking for feedback and advice, and that is what we are giving you.
ya i no and i want that ive been a member of this comunity for a few years, this is my new account for the show i was just bitchin cause of what zenx said
Expect to draw attention, even from unwarranted sources. ;)
Always, always, persevere in your own vision. If they can say something, you can say more. Especially since you are the one getting his hands dirty. :)
And, btw, you'd win the grand prize for this one, imo. :)
Again, thanks for making this video, and more power to you sir!
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and ya i will try to do better with the voices/volume next time but if you listen just a lil closer you will hear it.. my dad could understand it and hes never played a video game in his life
Seems like you used the method of play video texture on flat surface (1:58 in). Congrats
Lol at the ep2's name and the last scene of ep1, I could imagine you play the kerrigan card again.
Wow, really good work! Keep it up!
I'm confused.
Is this supposed to be funny? There's some jokes in there, but to be fair I found most of them rather lame and never really laughed. Only cracked a smile at the IdrA QQ about Zerg scouting reference. And at the RA reference from the Russian captain.
What the cinematic did was though, was epic. Some awesome shots in there and probably the best pure in-game cinematic I've seen to date. Terrain, sound and cameraworks are all splendid. My only recommendation here would be
A) less pointless swearing. It annoys me when series do this. I'm not so uptight I can't take a swear word or two, but when it's swearing for the sake of swearing, it just gets boring. 'Fucking' has no place in the sentence "Let's go to the fucking temple". Save it for "Those fucking bastards trapped us!" or such, if you must.
B) the voices. Go download yourself audacity, and use the lower and raise pitch function to create different voices. This allows you to change nothing but your accent when doing the actual recording, and it'll make the whole thing sound less wannabe and more professional.
I'd agree with mozared, especially the swearing. I think it's fine in certain situations, but by the end it seemed like somebody wanted to make zeratul sound mean, so they threw "fucking" behind ever other word. They fucking betrayed us! Get to the fucking temple! Oh, your so stupid, we're fucked if you ever take command, etc..
I'll also add the point that it wasn't really a comedy or a action movie kind of thing. It was like an actiony movie with a few jokes thrown in. Which is fine, but I thought you were going for a comedy show kind of thing.
edit- Never mind, saw you were actually going for an action/comedy. So good job ;)
Like I said before, though, overall it was good. You managed to keep me entertained for the entire 15 minutes ;)
First off THANK YOU VERY MUCH for your compliments on the camera and terrain work and such that is the part that took me the longest and i thought it worked out pretty well.
but the show is just supposed to be a fun, cheesy scifi show that doesn't take it self seriously. I understand what you guys are saying but to me its funny, just the way we act is the funniest part cause its so cheesy, and that's exactly what i was going for. im sorry but i cant please everyone and alot of people like it. and Taranus only said fuck 2 times and they were censored to boot. NONE of those lines you wrote even exist in the show! i welcome your compliments and even your constructive critisism but to throw all my voice acting and jokes in my face and tell me it sucks.. like its not a hollywood movie ITS A SHOW I MADE BY MYSELF IN MY BASEMENT FOR FUN!!!! it wasn't meant to be a big budget movie that Syscal and Ebert review. I worked by myself on it for four months and it just feels like a few people seemed bent on throwing it in my face and telling me its not good enough for them. just enjoy it and dont take it seriously cause I dont and i made the thing. i don't know what else to say like.. I did the best job that i could with what I had and im sorry if you don't like it.
I am adding subtitles, but when i made it i only had my comp to test on and many people watched it including my parents and it sounds perfectly fine, I can see on a laptop or smaller speakers mayb it doesnt sound as good but im not guna be able to hit everything perfectly. the captions are gunna take time cause youtube only allows you to put an actual caption track so I havto make one and get it working rite.
As people said, add subtitles. I just dont bother watching these things when you cannot hear/understand what the units (mainly protoss are saying)
so I cannot yet say if its good or not
I said the thing was the best pure in-game cinematic I've seen so far, how is that ripping apart your story and acting?
Really, I'm only trying to help you improve, as the 'genre' seems a bit off - the humor takes away from the action and vice versa, resulting in a film you can't quite take seriously but isn't quite humoristic either. If you don't want to take my advice, no need to get rabid about it or such - it's your film in the end and you're free to ignore me. But if you want other people to like it (and I'd say I fall under that category), you'd probably do well to adhere to suggestions.
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Is this supposed to be funny? There's some jokes in there, but to be fair I found most of them rather lame and never really laughed.
thats beyond constuctive critisism just tell me you dont like my jokes. do u not understand? would you like it if you worked on somthing for 4 months then someone told you that
I do wqant people to like it and people like you too i just feel like all my hard work is being disected like in a movie review or somthing lol.. like you make sence and i know what you mean but like if you dont like it now i doubt you will because i dont have a team or writers its just me and im trying my hardest to make somthing enjoyable so i must just not be a good enough writer for your tastes lol
and it is far from perfect but it never will be perfectly perfect i hope you can enjoy it even a little bit dispite the way it is. That would make me happy and thats all im aiming for
@Demonik420: Go
what I looked it did look like polished cinematic with nice visuals, but from what I read from comments the jokes/story is just not that good.
Spending time does not equal high quality product. If you do not have the talent for story telling that sux for you.
DEAL WITH IT!
@zenx1: Go
that was an extremely rude comment that had no constructive critisism in it. why would you even post that? like honestly. alot of people love my story and jokes and i think its good thats all that matters
@Demonik420: Go
nah. its quite horrible
@zenx1: Go
haha wow ok buddy thanks so much you make me feel all warm and bubbly inside
"but from what I read from comments the jokes/story is just not that good."
i actually dont see that said anywhere in any of the comments i see that the voices need to be louder. i didnt see anyone atall say anything about my story and one person said the jokes could have been funnier so i don't know what comments you are reading but i'd like to see them!
That depends on what is is I have created. If I know it's good and know the majority of the people will think that, I won't bother. If I'm not sure, then I might take this criticism quite seriously. I don't intend to be mean on purpose, but it was truthfully what I thought. The "I just pissed my pants joke" was one that really made me wonder why you'd even bother with it. Just as I pointed out the really bad, I also pointed out the good by saying it was epic.
If you so prefer I can filter my comments and just point out what I like, but aside from the fact that you wouldn't be getting anymore feedback if everybody did that, I would probably stop watching after a single episode. And people who agree with me would do the same. Nobody would ever say anything bad about your project, but everyone would simply stop following it.
Again; I am not trying to shoot your project down. Overall watching it definitely entertained me for 15 minutes. If you disagree with me, feel free to ignore me. I'm just being honest about what I thought and didn't sugarcoat it.
@Mozared: Go
no man thats what iom trying to say.. dont filter your comments cause thats pointless. im just saying that u cud just say i didnt like your jokes instead of what you said. but its because it thought u were just trying to be negative but whatever dont sensor your comments i want to hear them i just felt like alot of people who dont know how hard it was to make that were telling me it was bad cause first and foremost i made it for myself and friends and had alot of fun making it. like soo much fun... but i just took it in the wrong way. i wil try to be more open minded in the future. but to people like zenx that basically just told me that i was shit and my sotrytelling is shit.. thats just fukin rude in my opinion and shouldnt even be posted. he says that time doesnt equal high quality. who is he to say those kind of things to me for no reason thats just an attack on me personally and he doesnt know anything about me. thats just plain not conducive to the whole mapster environment and community IMO!
BTW mozared if you could give me or pm me some ideas on how youd make it beter than wud be fantastic
I to amongst others found it hard to hear the voices and you're probably going to do something about it but seeing your comments about it it seems that your main phrase to answer that is: My 55 year old dad understood it and he has never played videogames, what's that have to do with anything? Videogames? It's more of a speak english kind of deal, or is it just me? Other than that it was pretty awesome "Zeratuls" round swingy attack cracked me up =P.
First of all, I want to say that could be the coolest thing I have seen made in the SC2 editor so far.
HOWEVER, I agree with most of the other comments. However, you have to understand something about cheesy videos. They are funny because they are bad, not because they tell jokes. Go for funny and cool, not for action/comedy. If you want some advice, PM me and I will send you some. If you are going to make something this awesome, make every aspect of it epic. The only reason people are criticizing you is because the effects are so good, but then the storyline is, well, not. Don't take that personally, take that as a fact. Trust me, I know what kind of humor you are going for here, you just aren't quite reaching it.
Also saying that it is bad IS constructive. You now know that it is bad, and know that it needs to be fixed. Is it more constructive than explaining why it is bad? No, it is not. However it does give you information. Let it go, and realize that people will be jerks sometimes.
Ending note: Absolutely EPIC! Understand that posting in these forums means you are looking for feedback and advice, and that is what we are giving you.
Great to be back and part of the community again!
ya i no and i want that ive been a member of this comunity for a few years, this is my new account for the show i was just bitchin cause of what zenx said
It's awesome Demonik.
Expect to draw attention, even from unwarranted sources. ;)
Always, always, persevere in your own vision. If they can say something, you can say more. Especially since you are the one getting his hands dirty. :)
And, btw, you'd win the grand prize for this one, imo. :)
Again, thanks for making this video, and more power to you sir!
Whatever you do, wholeheartedly, moment by heartfelt moment, becomes a tool for the expression of your very soul.